Tuesday, February 10, 2015

Revised Haiku- any suggestions?

this is water
thoughts swirl 
how can we change 

Earbuds in
She spaces out
no worries 

After the rain
streets clean
A new start


Riding to the beach 
wind in my hair 
eighth grade memories 

Horrible puns 
laughing all day 
best friends 


2 comments:

  1. I think these are really good...concise and represent important moments.

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  2. I think you did a really good job. I think you managed to capture some really cool moments in these haikus.

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